Adressing the problem is the first step to advancement.

I think I need major improvement in my writing. I don’t feel as though I explain thoroughly enough what I want to explain. This is too big of a problem to leave unaddressed. By showing where and how I made mistakes I hope it will improve this area of writing for me. The reason I want to explain why these thing hurt my writing, it to improve my writing.
The hardest problem to approve one’s writing, I think is the one I previously stated. Here is what I found wrong with my assignments so far this semester. As I look back on my first week’s blog, I feel as though I did not state everything I thought clearly or effectively. I had an astronomical thought on the topic of health care reform but, when I started writing the thoughts, I saw that my thought did not appear as though they did in the head. Ultimately this made my writing less informative on what my thought where on this subject. This problem also affected my ability to write the assessment. The fury of thought that raced through my mind as I saw the topic were great, but they we not organized. As I tried to organize my thought I on this subject it slowed my writing down greatly, when I was done I realized I had roughly a half a page done, it’s sad really. If I could change one thing right now about my writing it would be explaining and organizing my thought clearer and, and more efficiently. Over all I do believe this blog strongly helped my writing and, is a turning point for the advancement of my ability to express my thoughts clearer.